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My only fear is that of which so many others long for – normality.  So many people may deny it, but normality is what they know keeps them “in line”.  It’s their fear of being weird that causes them to conform, and also the fear of what’ll happen if they don’t.  

Having this fear isn't genetics, and it’s nothing you can be born with.  This fear is learned by actions that are simple, but may scar on them by another being that is cruel and angry, and this scar can only be removed by others who don't have this fear.  The only way to not have this fear is to not be scarred, or to not care.  

To not be scarred is inevitable; eventually, you shall be exposed to the harsh winds of the bitterness of the world some time or another.  And to not care is only that of the strongest.  One day, whether influenced or simply realized, all burning insults are drenched with water, and you fear of being weird has dissolved as well.  Your eyes are healed from the blindness given to you, and you can see the truth.

Yes, you are proud of being your own person, and not simply one-in-of-million.  No, you know you’re special, and you know you earned it.  

The winter of the world is at its peak, but even then, you know summer is halfway around the world, and inside your warm parka of security, you are not cold like the ‘normal’ people around you.  And that’s what makes you the strongest in this world.
©2007-2008 ~OokamiFoxChild
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This is simply something I worked up, after thinking of Aki. The words echoed inside my head, the words 'My only fear is that of which so many others long for - normality.' over and over until I simply took five minutes or so, and the words kept spilling over until I get this.

I think I'd be a great phycology teacher. But yeah. Expect more lessons like this...seeing how I have about a million untold ones.

Tell me what you think. I'm interested to listen. =)

And if you feel you have something you'd like to debate with me about this, I'd love to add other sides. This is more than likely incomplete, but for now, I rest my case.
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~bdenhawk:iconbdenhawk: Sep 22, 2007, 1:15:33 PM
First thing. Read over your 2nd paragraph. For some reason, i don't really understand it.

Also The 3rd paragraph doesn't flow well with me.

If i were to be writing this i would say: " Ineveitably, you will be scarred. You shall be exposed to the harsh winds; the cold bitterness of the world some time or another. Only the strongest can take this fear and reverse it. All burning insults are drenched with water and the fear of being normal has dissolved as well. You are reborn. Now you are one who fears the norm and you are proud of it.

I would take out the part about heredity; you already stated earlier that the fear isn't genetics.

In the 4th paragraph, choose another analogy besides "one in a million" in the way you used it, it was correct. But another reader could also think of it as one in a million as in being special.

But that last paragraph is excellent. The metaphor used works well with that cold fear.

Overall, great concept. Just work on making your ideas agree with one another. I'm no english teacher so i may be wrong, but it's just something i noticed. Anway, this is the main things i could pick out....took me like 20 mins to get all of this.

Hope this helps, and sorry for the length:)

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~OokamiFoxChild:iconOokamiFoxChild: Sep 22, 2007, 5:01:51 PM
Well, that first sentence of the second might sound confusing, but you have to think. It's like either you're born with a gift, or your not. But that's not the case in this. And then there's also your parents have a fear of being normal, but that doesn't mean you'll automatically have it.

And no, I'm sorry, but I honestly felt that was the one that I let my emotions out the most. Though I agree, the hereditary doesn't make sense, so I'll fix that. But yeah. It's not the fact of being 'reborn' within this fear. It's more of your blindness has been cured, and you can see. (Hmmm...I might add that. xD) Though I might change the last sentence a bit on that one. It's kind of short for me.

Eh, whoops. That was supposed to be one of a million. ^^;

Thank you for that. I worked most of that last paragraph out on the laptop.

It's okay. I've had ideas like this since I was like, 7, so everything is flowing by now for me, so thank you for the comments! ^-^

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~OokamiFoxChild:iconOokamiFoxChild: Sep 22, 2007, 5:06:15 PM
Also the part about taking 20 minutes to understand it all, well, I dunno'. That's kind of what I was aiming for. Giving people something to think about...

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~bdenhawk:iconbdenhawk: Sep 22, 2007, 8:11:20 PM
Oh no, it's just that it took me like 20 minutes to think of ways to critique it.

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~OokamiFoxChild:iconOokamiFoxChild: Sep 22, 2007, 10:07:54 PM
Oh! xD Lol. Well, anyway, it's very appreciated. Thank you! ^-^

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