My only fear is that of which so many others long for normality. So many people may deny it, but normality is what they know keeps them in line. Its their fear of being weird that causes them to conform, and also the fear of whatll happen if they dont.
Having this fear isn't genetics, and its nothing you can be born with. This fear is learned by actions that are simple, but may scar on them by another being that is cruel and angry, and this scar can only be removed by others who don't have this fear. The only way to not have this fear is to not be scarred, or to not care.
To not be scarred is inevitable; eventually, you shall be exposed to the harsh winds of the bitterness of the world some time or another. And to not care is only that of the strongest. One day, whether influenced or simply realized, all burning insults are drenched with water, and you fear of being weird has dissolved as well. Your eyes are healed from the blindness given to you, and you can see the truth.
Yes, you are proud of being your own person, and not simply one-in-of-million. No, you know youre special, and you know you earned it.
The winter of the world is at its peak, but even then, you know summer is halfway around the world, and inside your warm parka of security, you are not cold like the normal people around you. And thats what makes you the strongest in this world.















Devious Comments
Also The 3rd paragraph doesn't flow well with me.
If i were to be writing this i would say: " Ineveitably, you will be scarred. You shall be exposed to the harsh winds; the cold bitterness of the world some time or another. Only the strongest can take this fear and reverse it. All burning insults are drenched with water and the fear of being normal has dissolved as well. You are reborn. Now you are one who fears the norm and you are proud of it.
I would take out the part about heredity; you already stated earlier that the fear isn't genetics.
In the 4th paragraph, choose another analogy besides "one in a million" in the way you used it, it was correct. But another reader could also think of it as one in a million as in being special.
But that last paragraph is excellent. The metaphor used works well with that cold fear.
Overall, great concept. Just work on making your ideas agree with one another. I'm no english teacher so i may be wrong, but it's just something i noticed. Anway, this is the main things i could pick out....took me like 20 mins to get all of this.
Hope this helps, and sorry for the length
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And no, I'm sorry, but I honestly felt that was the one that I let my emotions out the most. Though I agree, the hereditary doesn't make sense, so I'll fix that. But yeah. It's not the fact of being 'reborn' within this fear. It's more of your blindness has been cured, and you can see. (Hmmm...I might add that. xD) Though I might change the last sentence a bit on that one. It's kind of short for me.
Eh, whoops. That was supposed to be one of a million.
Thank you for that. I worked most of that last paragraph out on the laptop.
It's okay. I've had ideas like this since I was like, 7, so everything is flowing by now for me, so thank you for the comments! ^-^
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Never underestimate the fears of normality.
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Never underestimate the fears of normality.
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